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سین هفتم

  • سین هفتم
    سلام عطای عزیز.
    ممنون از شعر خوبت.
    شعر قشنگت یه کم از نظر وزن و قافیه ایراد داره ولی با یه ویرایش کوچیک درست می شه.
    مثلا اینطوری بنویسیم:

    ﻟﺤﻈﻪ ﯼ ﺗﺤﻮﯾﻞ ﺳﺎﻟﻢ ﺑﯽ ﺗﻮ ، ﻣﺮﺩﻥ ﻣﯽ ﺷﻮﺩ
    ﺍﺯ ﺩﻝ«سین»های من ﺳﯿﻤﺎﯼ ﺗﻮ ﮐﻢ ﻣﯿﺸﻮﺩ
    ﻣﺎﻫﯽ ﻗﺮﻣﺰ درون آب زﺍﺭﯼ ﻣﯿﮑﻨﺪ
    ﺳﯿﻦ ﻫﻔﺘﻢ ﮔﻢ ﺷﺪﻩ ،او ﺑﯽ ﻗﺮﺍﺭﯼ ﻣﯽ ﮐﻨﺪ
    ﯾﺎﻣﻘﻠﺐ ﮔﻔﺘﻪ ﺍﻧﺪﻭ قلب ﻣﻦ ﺟﺎﻣﺎﻧﺪﻩ ﺍﺳﺖ
    ﯾﺎ ﻣﺤﻮﻝ ﺣﺎﻟﻨﺎ باقی است از روز الست

    البته این ویرایش فقط یه پیشنهاده و مطمئن شما زیباتر خواهید نوشت.


نوشته شده در : شنبه 10 بهمن 1394  توسط : elmi raftar.    نظرات() .

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